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Betrayal of a friend's feelings, whether intentional or not, can rip friendship apart, and leave both feeling empty. I hurt someone I care about very much, and the pain was too great for her to bear. Her friendship is like a shooting star flaring briefly across the heavens, a moment in time that I will treasure forever. Maybe, with time, the garden where our friendship grew will blossom again. Do I respect her wishes and never talk to her again, or do I try to make things right? I don’t know. Until I figure that out, this poem is my emotional release.
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xxxalonexxx
this one's currently happening to me. she started it first. I felt betrayed and our friendship flew farther and farther away. She used to be my bestfriend. now. i dont know what she is to me.
Samuel
WOW! This poem is like me and my friend fought. I do not wish to do that to my friend anymore. So NICE! P. S. This is really my favorite poem. It is so touching.
Sarah
I looked at this poem because I was searching for a poem that would express the way I feel right now, and when I found this one, I had a case of the Mondays, or as it's really called, I started to cry.
Kelsey
This poem is really great. this is how i felt when me and my best friend got into a fight.
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Betrayal |
| by Dan McDonald |
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An echo fades into the night, an eerie mournful sound. A shooting star disappears from sight, and I crumble to the ground. There is no life within this garden; my sobs are the only sound. I have poisoned the honeyed fountain where your love could be found. Dazed, I stare at the stars above, my grieving howls fill the night! Unintended betrayal of love has hidden you from my sight. I remember how it used to be when we shared our fears and delights. You are a treasured friend to me. How can I make things right? Feeling afraid, cold and lonely, I long to tell you how I feel, but you don’t want to hear me. The pain for you is much too real. Should I back away and build a wall and block away how I feel? Or, should I give you a call? We both need some time to heal. An echo fades into the night as our friendship disappears. How do I know what is right? How can I ease my fears? If I do call you again, would the old wounds reappear? I can’t stand to cause you pain. Hurting you again is my worst fear! |
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sona
It is a wonderful poem!it makes our just broken friendship due to some mishappenings a new beginning. And eventually makes it even more stronger
SARAI
WOW AMAZING VERY GOOD!
felica
this inspired me very much me and my friend need to take a moment to think about this an our friendship.
Sara
Love this poem. It really touches my heart. I know what it is like. I just lost a friend of mine to something like this. Thank-you and keep on writing.
Emma
This is a wonderful poem! i just lost my own best friend because she thought that i was too "uncool" *mutters words under breath*. So ya! GREAT POEM DUDE!
gabriella
this poem really thouched me. i can really realate this poem to me and my best friend.
kelley
it was beautiful and it made me feel for the narratior of the poem.
tanya
i liked this poem bcoz it put in the same words dat i was looking for. i think iv just lost the best frndship in my whole life. dats y it touched me. its feelings bond mine too!
Sundus
That was awesome. personally, I have pretty much the same problem. My friend and I had a big-shot a while ago. Well i was real mad . buh i dunno anymore. buh well. i dont think i will go bac cuz well. a space kinda created cuz she found herself a guy, to which she doens't admit is the reason to cause a change in out relationship. Anyhow. it was lovely. said a lot. i was searchin poems on betrayal. buh honestly. i have agony to present in a very hateful manner. So yea. u show quite much of love in your friendship. ive had many problems. uhh. so. well my advice wud be if you wanna talk. wait a while man. cuz space and time are things that turn the coldest love into sorrowful hate. SO ya. tc. eZZzz.
Cindy
This poem reminds me of my friendship and how my friend betrayed me. I would never betray my friend but what my friend did to me was painful. The worst part is I still have to face her everyday in school. Every time I see her, the painful memories and all the happy memories that makes what she did even more painful flood back and I just can't stand it. I want to say something but I don't know if I should. I don't know what she'll say to me. I don't know what will happen. That makes me scared. I can't face her and yet I have to. Everyday I see her is one more time that I have to suffer. Every time I see her I always wonder why she would do such a thing. Yet I'm afraid to ask her, for what she might say might stab me in the heart, again.
deaira
it was a great poem and it touched me because i lied to my BEST friend and know she acts like im not even there i miss her so much and know i did her wrong but dont under stand why she wont give me another chance i dont know wat to do call her or leave it alone so basically this poem shares my life or at least a BIG part of it! THANK YOU* ps beatiful poetry why did you write it?
natasha
your poem means every thing to me. you see, i did this horrible thing to my dearest friends, the few girls i trusted ,they meant the world to me! i cant believe that i had done such a thing! they hated me for weeks. and now they just ignore me. when i see them laugh i wish i was there. but now i know i'll give them each a copy of your poem. and they'll know how sorry i am. ! GREAT POEM!
brenda
just one word. WONDERFUL!
Alero
I particularly like the poem cause I can relate with the writer. Presently I am going thru the same feelings of shame and hurt having hurt a friend I love so much. It's so real for me - the poem.
elli
I really loved your poem, it reminded me of all of the poems I have written about a friend I lost; that I pushed away. It helps me out of the gloom when I see someone else writing about something. kindof along the lines of what I am going through.
Reginald
this poem is much to real cause it sums up everything that has happened to me in the past few days. I like it
Kat
I love this poem! My 2 best friends in the whole world did that to me and this poem realy says what it feels like! They left me to go hang out with people who hated me then they told me what they had said and they said some really mean things about me and that was betrayal!
Ashley
i really liked this poem and the thing is that i had just went threw it i lost my one and only best friend last night over nothing and now i dont know what to do with me or the problem and so what i am trying to say is that this poem helped me express some of the same feelings as when you wrote it to and i am thankful ashley
lily
this poem is beautifully sad, and i understand how true it is.
Leigha
i would never send this to any of myk friends b/c they seem to be the only backstabbing people around me. is that what friends are really for?!?!
madline
i guess am voting becouse once i had the same problem,raeding this poem made me feel. well,a very strange feeling. each word remindes me of my past. about me and my old friend and how we used to be. so happy. so friends. and it also remindes me how we became apart. cause of my stupid,couse i didn't call her number. and i watched our friendship fade away
Patrick
This is an Awsome poem.
Misty
this poem was really good for a one to ten i would give it an eight
Joei
i think that this poem is very good for friends who betrayed each other for a very long time.
christina
i just lost my bestfriend and i didnt want it to end but it did and your poem really touched me.
David
Well said. Wish I could express myself that well
Maggie
I can;t believe that the feelings that I ahave trapped inside of me cxould be put into words so beatifully. Thank you for setting me free.
Stuart
I have just lost my best friend because I was falling in love with her.
cheradee
10 is my rank to your poem, i feel betrayed because of my best friend. i thought im lucky because i knew she was there beside. but she lied to me. i trusted her so much. so this pain would kill me now. i dont know, what will i going to do.
Natalie
it was a very nice poem. i think many people can relate to your poem. Good job.
Jessica
I love this poem! It reminds me of things iw ent through! or am going through!
meghaa
this was a real well written poem. u put across wat i wanted to say thank u
evie
this poem really touched me, you spoke all my feelings with four verses! my mate and i arn't talking at the moment and this has really helped me put things in perspective. thankyou!
Amber
I love this poem! I feel it really toched me. Good job!
Sunita
I kindda going through the same pain and when I read this poem it helps me ease the pain. Please keep writing these wonderful poems. thanks
Brittany
your poem was really good and i enjoyed it alot!
Shreyasi
This poem is awesome. My friend and me really need some time to heal up . Your poem encouraged me that there could still be life. Thank you so much!
Trevor
this song truely touched me cuz of the fact that i jsut lost a really good friend and that all my friends are leaving me for there boyfirends and it is jsut really depresing me to a maximmum extent. they have been my friedns forever and they just ditch me so ya ur poem is a really great peom and it is like talking about every1s life that has been hurt by a freind.
Mireille
Dear Dan, You are a very gifted poet and you have touched my soul like so few have in this life time. There are no coincidence but there are magical gifts from God and theres is angels and you are certainly one of them. If you ever read this note you will know that Mary is at work and you will know that a friend is ready to hear your friendly voice. I'm in Gatineau now. God Bless You my Forever precious Friend! Mireille XXXX
ganesh
wow ! i love this poem.
Ariana
good job! this is a great poem! yes like you said in your poem betrayal is the worst they can do to you in a friendship!
Hannah
Amazing. It's simply amazing. It seems to match up perfectly with the story of one of my ex-friends and me. After betraying me and losing my friendship, she actually stole this poem and claimed that she wrote it. Giving me this poem actually led to months of her stalking me, but I only recently found out that she had plagiarized the poem. But it was way too good anyway for it to have been written by her. I loved the style, I loved the content, I loved the wording. You are a terrific poet.
Marie
I think this was also very moving. I remember hurting someone I cared about very deeply and regretting it. It was such a movong poem.
Katie
This pain has happened to me before, so I know what it's like. I want to tell this boy how I feel and he pushes me away, and old woulds appear, but I just want to pour heart out and he doesn't want to hear it! It Hurts so much anywayz. This Poem kicks so much heinie, and it makes me keep reality in check. Keep up the good work!
Nicole
GEEZZZ! Talk about what I'm going through! Sighhh.
Katie
I like this poem!. me and my best friend just got into a huge argument over a stupid mistake i made and i dont think she will forgive me even though i tried so hard and dont wanna lose her because me and her have 2 many memories and it wood have been a waste of time and im soo srry for what i did to her! i hope me and her can become best friends again. and for anyone out there please think of ur bestfriend before u do sumthing!. guys or anything else isnt worth losing ur best friend over!
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