This poem was written as a class assignment, and the inspiration came from the first line, which popped in my head as though someone else were trying to tell their story through me. Though written in first person, the speaker is a character other than myself. I found in writing the poem, however, that I was able to push away some of my own depression as I lost myself in the speaker's lonelier existence.
Was I bewitched so by the thin red line
To notice not that time released its hold
And let pale Iris snip the silver twine
To steal sweet youth before it turned to gold.
Existence now is not what I was told;
No seraphim and harps to grace my ear,
Just silence, painful silence, and the cold
Discomfort of my masochistic fear,
So icy cold, yet somehow seems to sear
My soul until the ache's too much to bare,
As mortal life mirages now appear:
Intangible are they; away they tear.
Mistake, it was; the curtain fell too soon
When razor's edge did charm me like the moon.
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o god. this poem describes 2 of my best friends, and almost me. it's amazing how real this seems. the emotion is so vivid, so strong, it's scary. but it's a really good poem.
jessica
im goin thro this right now so i kno wat its lyk an i rly understand the meanin of this poem. its very good.
shannon
the poem reached into my heart and made me feel a way that i thought wasnt possible 10/10
chelsea
i fell your pain
zachary
oh my god. this poem has to be the best i have ever heard. this is number one with me and i will share it with friends. lhis poem will forever linger in my heart and thare it will stay
Sarah
hey! i loved this poem. i myself am suicidal, and just reading this poem ment alot. I always think, well. wat if i accidently slipped and did something wrong. after reading this poem, i am seriously going to try and stop. Thanks for the insperation! Sarah~*
nickie
for all of you that feel like there's no more hope in life, like a very wise guy once said, put your burdens on Jesus, and he will cary them for you.
alishia
i just wanted to say that i thought that your poem was pretty good. nice job
Katie
Yeah I liked this people in this world are so mean why cant they jus leave us punks/goths alone?
Jenna
Loved it.
Johna
I love this poem, I love it so much. I'm going to post it on my web.
'stina
That is so rockin love the talent keep writen.
Amanda
omg that was so touching! you say that you heard that in your head as if someone was telling you what to write? i have a couple of poems i wrote that remind me of your description of what you said how you wrote this if you'd like to here them please email me at some time thank you and by the way i like your poem
jessica
it was very inspiring and i have had thoughts and this poem helped me so much.
micki
wow.
N/A
i like this poem because it has a lot of meaning.
Jade
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randy
oh wow i love this poem so much. your really good at this ya know!
Laurana
I understand this clearly. I used to be a cutter and when it says "When razor's edge did charm me like the moon. " I can say that's exactly what happeneds. When I write about my friends read my stuff and say I should publish it but I can't I never told my mom I cut and my dad found out but the school so he wouldn't mind. Thats a nice poem
greg
oh my god this is gotta be the best thing i have read on this topic for a long time i am like this but i am better do give it a rating i would give it 10/10 cuz it just touches you and rly gives you an understanding of the topic
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