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At times we may forget that soldiers are just people like everyone else. They laugh, they cry, they have sweethearts and mothers, birthdays and favorite cars - and they die.

Sometimes when we are celebrating victories we forget about those who made it possible, those who gave the ultimate sacrifice for their country.

Small Pain In My Chest

The soldier boy was sitting calmly underneath that tree.
As I approached it, I could see him beckoning to me.
The battle had been long and hard and lasted through the night
And scores of figures on the ground lay still by morning's light.

"I wonder if you'd help me, sir", he smiled as best he could.
"A sip of water on this morn would surely do me good.
We fought all day and fought all night with scarcely any rest -
A sip of water for I have a small pain in my chest."

As I looked at him, I could see the large stain on his shirt
All reddish-brown from his warm blood mixed in with Asian dirt.
"Not much", said he. "I count myself more lucky than the rest.
They're all gone while I just have a small pain in my chest."

"Must be fatigue", he weakly smiled. "I must be getting old.
I see the sun is shining bright and yet I'm feeling cold.
We climbed the hill, two hundred strong, but as we cleared the crest,
The night exploded and I felt this small pain in my chest."

"I looked around to get some aid - the only things I found
Were big, deep craters in the earth - bodies on the ground.
I kept on firing at them, sir. I tried to do my best,
But finally sat down with this small pain in my chest."

"I'm grateful, sir", he whispered, as I handed my canteen
And smiled a smile that was, I think, the brightest that I've seen.
"Seems silly that a man my size so full of vim and zest,
Could find himself defeated by a small pain in his chest."

"What would my wife be thinking of her man so strong and grown,
If she could see me sitting here, too weak to stand alone?
Could my mother have imagined, as she held me to her breast,
That I'd be sitting HERE one day with this pain in my chest?"

"Can it be getting dark so soon?" He winced up at the sun.
"It's growing dim and I thought that the day had just begun.
I think, before I travel on, I'll get a little rest ..........
And, quietly, the boy died from that small pain in his chest.

I don't recall what happened then. I think I must have cried;
I put my arms around him and I pulled him to my side
And, as I held him to me, I could feel our wounds were pressed
The large one in my heart against the small one in his chest.

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419 Visitor Comments

khadijah
how touching. i have two boys over seas. USMC. I do understand this poem.
rebecca
They did a great job. It was a very deep poem.
Andrea
my son served in Iraq and I prayed for the good Lord Jesus to return him safe and sound and he did. This poem reminds me of the sons and daughters that didn't come back alive and so it touched me in many ways. I think this poem is wonderfully written and touvhes the heart in it's deepest recesses. Good Job!
richa
a great and a touching one. i don't know how. but could feel the pain while reading it. it really touched my heart . there are very few writings which can move your heart. and it did.
lynn
One of the best I have ever read. Thank you.
elizabeth
So real. Unfortunately.
Alexis
the poem is great, it can touch the reader's heart.
Krystal
Wow that was really good.
Tammy
This poem touched me because my dad was in airforce and he held his best friend and watced his friend go. this is the best poem I have read in a in a really long time my dad was born in 1937 and he would say this poem had a lot of heart because it happened to him. thank you for touching my heart.
Xochil
The poet does a good job telling a story. i like it.
zach
Wow! Awesome. it touched me so much . We really nevert think bout how the soldiers r fightin. For our own peace! Keep writng u r helpin put on on message n voice out there!
rachill
truly beautiful in a sad way wanted to read it again and again
annetta
This is one poem that actually touched the inside of my soul. I have a brother that was in the service, and I worried about him daily. I was one of the lucky ones that never had to receive that call. For my brother, I say Thank You.
ninina
the poem is very touching and i think its been one of the passionate poem on earth
alexander
having been a soldier for 18 years and having served in N. IRELAND and the falklands, when i read this poem it brought back memories of tumbledown and the sheer futility and absurdity of armed conflict. it brought back the feelings i had as i watched my friends die or get wounded following orders, i think the author has captured the aftermath of a battle where even the winners lose, i would be interested to know if the author had ever been in a live battle. once again i would like to congratulate the author in capturing the heartrending aftermath of battle
Morgan
This poem is very deep I really like it alot!
molly
the poem is beautiful. i felt a little pain in my chest too. i am also tired after the battle of life i am in. but my life continues with this little pain in my chest and with great strong support of dear god. i always know compared to others my life is always better and find happiness in sharing the little pain of other small hearts around me.
brookie
i love this poem and im only 12 years old
Benjamin
I am a soldier in the u. s. army and i can't help but feel like that was one of my comrades, it hits so close to home, it almost brought tears to my eyes, I am proud to say that i serve with men like that, That is the type of soldier that dies for this great country everyday, so that everyone has the freedom to write great poems like this. thank you for taking your time to write this poem in rememberence of our fallen heros.
Monique
This poem was beautiful, because it was true. Truth is beautiful, because even in all out ugliness and darkness it allows the soul to focus on a moment's action; and thus set a course. It's an amazing testament to a person's humanity and the heartbreak of our frailties. A MILLION STARS & THUMBS UP TO YOU! Thank You.
Gillian
I also felt a pain in my chest hving read this poem! Really touching!
margarita
Thank you Mr. Mack for this wonderful and heartfelt poem, i am going to share with many of my friends, its what is really happening with this war, many people don't acknownlage and praise what our MAN are doing for us so we can live in this land of freedon, god bless our troops and god bless AMERICA, THANK YU
Gloria
I loved this poem , so sublime and full of truth.
Manessa
Your words gave me chills, thinking about all the young people who have lost their lives in battle. I don't know any personally but your poem made it personal for me. Thank you and God Bless
Ellie
This poem has incredible amount of depth. Each word, Each line, Each stanza i can picture everything. From the moment the man was beckond, to the time he held the soldier in his arms. I had tears in my eyes, and makes think how many people are out there fighting for us, and our country. I bless each and ever soldier out there, and pray that they serve and be able to come back to their families. I too know people serving and am proud of each of them.
Jane
This poem really touched my heart,more than ive read yet. It seems as though the war goes on the boy was fighting yet. may god rest his soul. always remembering our true heroes.
Lewis
You've got real talent, you look at whats really there underneath. Anyway you need to pursue writing as a career! I would be simpley honoured if you told me the story behind this poem. I really enjoyed it!
Navya
This poem touches everyone's heart . and speaks the truth . which very few experience in life . Hats-off to all those brave soldiers protecting us . and its at the cost of their lives that we are leading such a peaceful life.
melissa
Aw, that was wonderful~ Touching! Missie
Susan E.
I was very much touched by this poem. Our servicemen deserve so much honor for fighting for our country. They are so couragious and they give their all for our country and to keep us safe. God be with each and everyone of these brave men and women and protect them from harm and help them to return home safe to their families and friends. WE LOVE YOU FOR KEEPING OUR COUNTRY SAFE AND OUR HEARTS ARE WITH YOU.
j
Brought a sadness to my heart because my son and daughter could be the soldier. God forbid it won't be.
misty dawn
that was just wonderful and so sad.
Rosalina
This poem was great very awesome i am a very young teacher who works as a lanuage arts. This poem touched my heart keep up the great work now im going to share this poem with my students i bet they will love it too!
sarah
This poem made me cry, smile, but most of all, reminded me that we are all just mortal beings at the end of each gruelling day.
Dolores
I love this poem it has a special meaning to me because I have 3 children in the service 2 young men in the Marines and one Young lady in the Army. It breaks my heart to think that this could of had being my child. One of my boys served in Ireq twice and my daughet was over there too. Keep up the good work.
colby
I don't know if Michael Mack is renowned or not, but a poem like this rivals some of the most touching and thoughtful poems that I have ever read. the irony at the end of the poem made me feel like the man with the canteen. i am 15 years old and doing a project for school, and was not expecting such an incredible poem.
sade
Michael, im totally speechless on this one. i mean that was brillant and touching. im 17 and i like to think of my self as a love/relationship poet but i have a long way to come. just by reading some of your poems michael mack youve mad me one of ur biggest fans
keyaisha
fabolous!
Fanci
The poem really hit my heart. But, I don't what to do with that pain.
Mekis
I just love this poem, it really touched my heart.
maria
This poem really touched me because I have friends so close that I consider family,and they are in Iraq this moment. it really reflects on how I feel about the war and my close friends. and to this poet, I just want to let you know that you are a really good writer and to never give up hope. I wish you luck and keep writing!
Brandon
this poem has enlighted my view on the pain of war one of the best ive read off this site
Perla
You know I had a step dad who went to war and what he saw he cannot recall why it was so painful watching all of them die and seeing himself holding a knife ful of something he couldn't have life with and thinking and thinking were did this come from
latahsa
i love your poem it is mice to read whan your in or not in the mood by latahsa ross
jessica
This is just an amazing poem. its so touching and the writer did a good job of capturing the patriosm of a soldier and the value of what a soldier gives up for strangers. im really impressed. amazing writing.
M
Nice use of understatement.
marie
realy brought home the bravery and the uglyness of war.
Marlina
Oh my goodness. I honestly havent cried in about a year and your poems made the tears come down. My grandpa was in the war and I have so much respect for the soldiers so hearing a poem as amazing as this truly touched me.
Cheryl
This was so Awsome! To me. So Beautiful. Thank You.
PK
What a wonderfully written piece! With all the media coverage regarding numbers, its hard to remember the soldiers as an individual. This poem reminds us(me) and I'm thankful! -PK
Ella
wow! i really felt the emotions when i read it. it's a very strong poem. and it touched the hearts of many.
teisa
this poem really toutched me keep me informed on your poems
Michael S
This beautiful really touched a warm place in my heart. For so many years I ques-tioned as to "why" I returned home to my loved ones with only a deep hurt in my heart. Many sessions helped me to deal with this problem and never forget how lucky I truly was. Thank you for your creative poem.
Johnny
. I felt like I was there holding the boy close to my chest, a tear was building up in my eye as I finished reading your sad poem. It touched me
amy
Great poem! Original,creative, timeless and definitely pulling at the heartstrings! I really enjoyed it.
robyn
Im inspired by this poem i write portery myself, and had gone through alot of hard ships in my short life, one never really knows how to appreciate are own life until hearing something like this,i have lost a dear friend in the war last september, and have not been the same ,Thanks! for sharing that poem it has touched me dearly. God bless you!
donna
i read your poem. it touched me deep inside. thank you.
lillian
this was so moving and evocotive made me remember holding my husband as he diedand of course cry like a baby
ritu
a really heart breaking poem dat simply states that life is to be loved and lived. your thoughts are marvellous. hats off to u. keep inspiring youths in this fabulous way of writing down poems.
Dani
this caused a small pain in my chest
Minerva
I loved this poem, may I use it in my blog. Very insightful.
Francine
I hate the war, I love the soldiers Your poem is so touching one of the best.
Mary
This poem is WONDERFULL! It makes you want to stop and think about what is going on beyond our protective borders,like in Iraq and places ike that! It makes you want to take it all awawy from the people who are going thrue things like this and don't disserve what they are going thrue!
Lorna
absolutly fantastic. It brought a tear to my eye. I have put the poem on my bebo page. Michael Mack you should b proud.
Caroline
Thank you. This poem reminds me of what our soldiers are prepared to give up for us. Extrodinary writing.
ingrid
this poem has touched me deeply i never realized how important our soldiers fighting in iraq really are thank you
Farah
Very nice, very touching. Made me almost cry.
Kathy
So true and so heart warming it made tears run down my soft cheeks. This is a poem that should be given to all those that have fought and are still fighting for our country. The are there to give us and others in another part of the world a better life. Although i want all of our soldiers to come home I thank God for them each and every day, and they are always in my prayers.
Saka
Personally, i think this poem is one of the greatest poem that i've seen
Princess1294
i think this poem was just great! it wus realli touching and i think you're realli talented to be able to write this poem! i try to do poetry as well, but i aint that gud! lol. i would rate this poem '1' on a scale of one to five (five being worst)
rahu
tht was such a wonderful poem. i like the way it ended and. it really was touching. i lov it
terrie
I really loved this poem, very emotional. This poem gves you an insight into a soldiers mind and feelings, and how they have to cope. wonderfully written. hope we see more like it.
Margareta
This poem moved me to tears
Rebecca
wonderful
Sarah
OmG, this is the best poem I have ever read. its so sad and its so good. it is now officially my fave poem of all time.
Rebecca
This poem was very touching
Danielle
It is really good! I loved the rhymes you said and wrote. I could actully sence the sorrow the men felt!
Mohammed
the further i read, the more it moved me, and the message behind it is so true. i will carry a 'pain in my chest' from now on
erica
that was a very good and emotional poem
Sydney
This was a sad poem i almost cried i write poetry too alot i love writing sometime i just write what i feel or if im mad at someone i just get mean i love my poems and i enjoyed this one
Jaclyn
I think this poem made me cry! It's so sad.
jessica
i love this poem its so good i think it lets people know about how hard it is to be solider
Phyllis
This gets my vote as a 4 star poem. It is beautifully done and the story it tells of our military warriors and what they endure hits directly at 'a large pain in my heart. '
jesica
this was amazing. great job. it truly tells the seriousness of being out at war. thank you!
Amanda
This poem is inspirational and a great thought. It touched my hearts in more ways than one. This poem is very good.
Jude
This is awesome. it brought tears to my eyes. Good job.
Jose
I just got done reading your poem, and its one of the best poems i have ever read in my life. I think you got the talent to be someone important in life and i really mean it. Keep on goin and take whatever comes with what you try on doin in life.
Sarah
wow. this seriously moved me. this just bacame my all time fav poem. (and i have a lot of favorite poems. ) im going to use this in a school project.
Valerie
WOW! This poem is so touching!. I can barely find words to describe how meaningful it is.
Melissa
this poem. it really touched me deeply! i was just sitting here in my computer class in high school and surfing through random poems and i think by fate i found thisone because its changed my outlook completely in just a few words. thank you for writing it!
Kimberly
This was a very unique poem. It showed great expression and was very understandable. I liked this poem because it really shows how important life can be.
Jean
It was just sooo sad . I had to dry my eyes
xXxrachaelxXx
this is the most beautiful, inspirational and perhaps saddest poem i have ever read. thank you xxx
jim
sad and very touching.
Sandra
This was absolutely amazing and well written. Thank you for sharing it with us.
James
Beautiful
Dana
I simply have no words to convey what this poem has said to me . It touched a cord in my soul that has not been touched for quite some time. I think you have an awsome story quality and a talent far more than even you could realize! Keep on please for the sake of the readers! Exceptionally gifted. Thumbs up!
Amy
I enjoyed this poem so much, it really touched me. I have been performing poetry since I was 5, and last year when I was 16 I was completing my diploma in Speech and Drama. My teacher said the poem was too difficult to pull off, so I decided that I would do it at the regional eisteddfod to see how I went. The audience didnt clap when I finished, there was silence till I left the stage then they applauded. I won that section and decided to perform the poem for my diploma exam, which I passed and got 94% for that poem!
PENNY
This poem literally made me choke on my tears. My 19 year old son is currently stationed in Camp Lajun, Jacksonville, NC. He is what he whole heartedly wanted to be since he was 14 years old, a United States Marine. Not a day goes by that I dont pray that god keeps him and his buddies safe!
Tia
I really like that poem. It is so sad what happen to the boy. I started to cry.
atasi
its really nice poem. it makes me cry. thank you very much.
jaDe
I really don't know what to say. but it really makes me sad that the boy died because of the "small pain in his chest" the poem is really good, I was really touched I even don't know what to say anymore hehe.
Kim
This was an amazing poem, it really it home for me. My boyfriend of 3yrs has recently joined the army. I am so proud of him and who he has become. I am thank-full for all those who put their lives out there to keep our counrty safe, and all the people in it safe as well.
becky
Everyword was precious . .
Daniel
I think this poem is amazing because it tells of a how small boys were made 2 fight in the war and it was very unfair and this poem explains thtat in a touching way and with a almost perfect ryhme scheme.
romalyn
I vote this poem because is so beautiful. When i read this it feels me better and i can't understand why? 'cuz sometimes my aunt yell at me and i can't accept it. it's still in my heart.
tani
i love this poem. the way it goes slowly and u know something is gonna happen at the end and u r just gripped by the way the poem goes. it is so beautiful and yet so sad. i love it!
Tina
I liked it a lot, but it also made me sad. This person did a great job with this ;P
alastriona
I really like this poem. I think that the people that start wars should read this and remember that the soldiers that have to fight are people too. It reminds us that the ones that die, people grieve for, and the ones that live, have to remember the others dying while they live, which can be almost as painful.
Karina
This was just magnificent, what a beautiful poem describing the pain behind the guns and powder. I give it a 10
christian
that was the saddest poem i have ever read
Deanna
ITS TOUCHING AND SAD WITH THE WORD BEAUTIFUL WAY_NOT_COOL
Rachel
this is amazing!
Leonard
Thank you michael for this touching poem. Coming from a soldier on his 3rd tour in Iraq this is a great and heart warming poem. I have seen friends pass away in these sands, and often wonder why I have lasted as long as I have.
Rebecca
Awesome poem, really gets to the heart. I give you a lot of credit, magnificent work. Keep up the great poetry!
TAMI
WOUNDERFUL KEEP ON WRITING!
niki
this poem is one of th saddest poems i have ever read but also one of the best. it touched me greatly. i give it 100 out of a possible 10
Lisa
This was a touching poem. one that I will remember for along time to come. Was it written by a soldier? A war Vet? Just would love to know the background. Or if it was written by a person whom lost someone in the war? Someone who is living the time of war?
michelle
This poem choked my thoughts. I love it!
Stephanie
I love this poem. It does seem that we are so hungry for the victory that we forget the soldiers that have made it possible. We remember them once a year and celebrate, but to many they are forgotten. Thank you for this poem! My husband is a soldier and it really hit home! God Bless Our Soldiers!
R. S. Via
Thanks Michael for such a well expressed appreciation for the reality of military sacrifice and service. We can't be reminded too often that someone that the precious gifts of life, liberty and the persuit of happiness are always expensive. God Bless You Pastor Steve
Chris
That is amazing! I don’t think I need to justify my comment… anyone who reads that poem will agree with me.
sissy
I really liked this one, at first i didn't want to read it becuase it looked to long, but then i started reading it and i couldn't stop. This is a real good one!
Katrina
I think it's great to see a poem that can touch people (JUST LIKE THIS ONE DOES)rather than it just being a few words that rhym thrown together. Thank you so much Michael Mack, I love your poem 'Small Pain In My Chest.
Georges
Very good job Micheal it was so touching i loved it it gave me Aplus plus in my talk on ur poem THANKS SO MUCH MICHEAL!
Thamir
Wow! i am not a good poem writer and definitely not a soldier but your poem is splendid, it is very heart-warming and inspiring. thanks
grace
this poem is extremly beautiful i dont have words its nice and it touched my soul keep up the good work Mr. Poet!
Kirsty
Oh my god, your poem was amazing. It had my in tears for ages and it touched my heart so deeply! I fortuately have no family or friends that are currently serving in the army but by reading your poem it made me realise that other familys do have loved ones out there and quite frankly it scared me, to think millions of people have lost loved ones in the way you described! Well done on a terrific, amazing piece of work! x
Becky
This was extremely Beautiful!
kandiss
wow! this was great from beginning to end! the author sounds like a solider whether he is or isnt. I continue to pray for the soliders over in Iraq poems like these make me remember that my freedom is owed to a solidier! great job to the author!
lori
I have an 18 year old son, I hope he never see's war, I hope they never bring back the draft. I'm just a mother
Kris
Hauntingly beautiful. This poem is a vivid reminder of the day to day cost of our freedom and the War on Terror. Nothing is free. Thank you for that much needed shove out of complacency.
Deb
Sad yet wonderful write! Very touching! I love poems about our fighting men and have written several myself. From one poet to another, Kudos, Sir! I am very impressed! This is a very powerful and moving piece, indeed!
Jasmine
This poem was AMAZING. very heart-felt. i loved it. it touched my soul.
amber kay
one word: awsome! two words: totally awsome! three words: totally freakin awsome! i love this poem! it made me cry!
Brittany
I loved the poem. I think I fall in love with it every time I read it.
janet
Loved the poem. I cried with him. My son is a member of the armed forces.
Tammy
Your poem has really touched my heart. I have never cried, reading a poem, but yours touched my heart in ways that i cried.
Marleen
An amazing poem. This poem really touched me. It was written so well and with such love and conviction. I only hope that one day I too can write such a wonderful poem. I was also touched because I am a veteran. Thank you for sharing.
nonkululeko
This poem touched me deeply and made me realise how we neglect the smallest things in our lives i hope this poem gets to every young man and women MORE FIRE KEEP UP THE EXCELLENT WORK !
lizzy
i like this one. very beautiful
angel
i am an activist against this war and the present administration. i really like this poem because it shows the pain of war. excellent poet. angel
connie
the poem was very very good, touching, sad,sorrowful,but at the same time it was great reading the poem cuz of all the poems by great poets this was trully the first one that made me cry!
Wanda
This was one of the most moving poems I've read in a long time. So much sacrifice all over the land for others. Thanks for being a vessel to get this message out through this poem.
Rachel
Lump in my throat.
sarah
This Poem was very incredible
Tonia
That was a wonderful poem of a soliders bravery. I will share it with my friends and family.
kate
the most touching poem i have read in such a long time. it made me feel so proud to be a part of the human race and being able to make a difference and use peoms such as this as motivation to be helpful to others and have a large heart just like the man in the poem.
Sarah
Wow!
Mary
all I can say is this: u have a gift.
Joxie
Oh my God
Sheli
I have loved, and dabbled in writing, poetry as far back as I can remember. There are certain pieces that just break my heart and touch me so deeply - and this is one of them. You have an awesome talent! Thank you for sharing it with the world.
Anupam
i was just looking for some good poetry online when i got to read this one. its one of the best poems i've ever read. honestly it hurts reading this poem. go on with the good work
Paige
very sad i liked it still very good
Beaty
Wht can I say beautifully written such sentiment brought tears to my eyes I could picture it in my mind and I shall paint it . Thank you for sharing this with me
Janice
I loved the poem! It is so true- soldiers are not only human, they are humans putting their lives on the line for each and every one of us and our wonderful country! We had a very dear friend that gave the ultimate sacrifice in Ramadi, Iraq in January of this year. Only 19 years old and he was so proud to serve our country. This poem describes exactly how he was. Now, my son is in Marine boot camp very eager to serve our country and defend everything we stand for. This would be an excellent poem for everyone to read. (and digest) Thanks for the beautiful expression. God Bless
Fatima
it was wonderful! nice thing to feel the pain of those to whom we owe our life and peace
mel
I vote for Small Pain In My Chest i think it's an amazing piece of art. It really touched me because i've had and still do have family members that have been in a war. I also think it was kinda romantic in a very strange way. Thank you so much melissa
Cherish
I loved it. I have friends and family overseas right now. It was touching.
Beatrice
Beautiful,very moving,by the end i was crying.
armyboi
well being in the military i'd have to say thanks for writing about what alot of us out here go through. some people never really know the burdens we carry when we watch our friends fade away. thank you for putting it into words.
dave
Excellent use of rhyme and meter, and imagery, all working together to make the story you tell all the more vivid and touching.
Sandra
A gentle poem about the gruesome and deadly ways of war.
LaManda
Wow! Your poem literally left me speechless. You are a very talented writer! Keep up the good work! LaManda Russell
dani
wow. this poem is sooo sad, it almost made me cry :o[ it made me think more about my grandpapa cuz he was in the war and he held his best friend in his arms as his friend was dying. then he died 20- years after the war
samantha
i love this poem its heart worming and sad :(
Kara
I loved your poem, it touched me. I almost cried. -Kara, 14
joyanne
it seems this poem is the exact thing i felt when my uncle had died when i was about 6.
Lee
I am a soldier myself, and i can only say, life passes us every second of everyday. This poem brings back a sense of duty, and honor to those sacred few, who don the uniforms of the armed forces of the world, in hope of protecting their people, in giving their people a second chance, even if it means making the ultimate sacrifice. God bless !
Joyce
Beautiful poem and to remember and honor all our soldiers and vets. They have paid the price for freedom with thier lives. How can we ever ever forget them? I won't. They all my heroes.
amelina
this poem made me cry because this war were in affects us all for me, my ex husband he's been serving our country for almost 20years now and he's a good father a very loved father it doesn't matter that were not together and we are both happily married but it made me think if something would happen to him how life for my kids would be empty and that i'm sure he thinks of that, his main thing is that he helps keep there (our kids)world safe from the unknown so he must do what he must do.
genise
i dont give this a 10 i give it a 50 if i can. I had tears in my eyes when I was done reading. I look at the world everday and i see people, out here that just about themself and we have all those men and women giving thier live everday for us. and the mother and wife, and kids that are loseing their love ones. my heart goes out to everone may god bless and keep tham all forever and a day
LYNDA
The poem was sad, but the whole time I felt joy by the simpleness, compassion and love. It doesn't take much. but we are all so busy that we never take the time to see the beauty, joy and truth in it. This one was great
Fiona
Hey you dont know me but that poem is amazing you should never give up writting poems and should take it further if you havent alreay, i to right poems not as good as that though. keep it up. x
jan
beautiful, and heartbreaking for sure.
Katelyn
I LoVeD this poem
Mike
I vote this poem to be one of the best, a perfect ten
Tyrone
I loved this freakin poem. it ment so much to me and i could feel the words.
dasha
i love this poem it is very heart touching
Amy
Im married to a soldier, he has served in the military for over 20 years now. I am so glad that he has made it through with minimal scars. It is the scars on the inside though that will forever live on in his heart. Thank you for this touching poem that brings what our men and woman in the military close to our heart.
Smiley
So sweet. so achingly sweet. The poetry was simple, concise, and beautiful. It perfectly portrays love and bravery in a young "soldier boy". I love it.
justine
OMG!I have just read this great poem and it's so beautiful and it touched my heart so much. I have made a copy so before i go to bed i can read it over and over again. I knew it was the right poem to read to my english class. And i have to say theirs not many like that poem that touches mu heart. bye
Samantha
Great poem! i loved it it was beautiful
Tika
This poem is amazing. It is so touching. Just Amazing. not sure which word to use. just. wow!
Mary
this made was very touching and made me weep
Krista
This poem. is just wow. He tells a story and it is just so touching to read. I loved this poem!
caroline
I see the flowers on the rolling hills, wind gently flowing the blades of grass of sea green on my ranch. As our devoted soilders risk and give thier lives for me to sit at peace, enjoying the freedom and solitude they so bravely gave to me. A tear is not enough, your poem reminds me how fortunate I am and how gratefull I should be. Thank you for your poem
Sevin
Kudos! It's been awhile since a poem had me choked up by the end. My brother is overseas now in a land where no boy should be. I pictured him so vividly while reading your poem. Wonderful job in putting together such an expression into words!
Heledd
This poem was so touching and so relevant to our world today that I thought I had to vote for it. Many people back home cannot comprehend how it must feel to be on the front line in a war - the fear and the worry that these men and women must feel. By voting for this poem, I somehow feel that I am giving my support in remembering soldiers that gave their lives to their countries and their fellow countrymen. We really cannot thank you enough.
Sean
This is a truly FANTASTIC poem, it was very moving.
gopa
It was very touching. I think it's a brilliant poem, beautifully written.
poeticart
this is a really nice poem. it makes me wanting for more of your brilliant work of art. keep up the good work.
Brenda
I love to read and write poems, this touched my heart. We so often forget about our men and women fighting for our country. This is a small reminder of it. We lose them everyday and here we all sit in some comfort, while they are risking thier lives. Great job with this poem. I hope it touchs others as it touched me. I pray that God will keep them all safe from harm.
Jennifer
WOW! That poem was amazing. It made me feel what you were saying. It was beautiful. Thankyou for your work
chamian
i cried and i rarely do
lodaina
i love all of your poems you are a great athour please write another for me to read. the stories you tell are always with passion, i enjoy your stories very much.
E
This poem was very touching. It makes you appreciate what the soldiers are doing to on their own free will to fight for owr freedom. I wish the world would show more appreciation for them. After all they are someone's son and daughter
JENNIFER
Your poem really touched my heart. My younger brother lost both of his legs fighting the war we are in now. He almost lost his life,I thank god for sparing him,and pray for the families of the soldiers not so fortunate. God bless each and everyone of them.
jill
I liked this poem very much. It was very touching.
Doris
This poem is so timely. If we keep it close, we will surely remember to pray daily for our boys and girls in this awful terrorist war.
Shannon
I love this poem. It is sweet, enduring, and inspiring. Great Job!
mosunmola
WOW! This poem is really touchy. I dont konw that we still have some one that write am emotional poem like this. You just make my day with this piece of poem. Good job! keep it up!
Diana
I have read something like this before it is really nice to know wat our soldiers really feel i guess this is the best poem i ever read in my life time. Thanks for making us reliase that soldiers are also human like us thanks it was beautiful.
sandi
. the last line. the heart touching the chest. all of it. filled with emotion; I cried.
LaRochelle
This was a heartstopping poem that touched me very deeply. your poem made me see what i usauly want to ignore. thanks
karina
as i was reading it, tears were going down my cheek, i think that says how much it touched me.
Shannon
This is so sad. It makes you want to cry. At first I thought the "pain in his chest" was pain from seeing what he saw at war.
leif
it is a deep poem that im sure touched many people
Karima
I was looking through the internet for something to read at my school read aloud and i think, so far, nothing i found is as wonderful and touching as this poem. it honestly made me cry myself. it has all the truth and warmth a poem needs to be loved by its readers and i urge you to keep writing becuase you honestly have the confidence and skills you need --karima
Lusiana
This is my first-time visit to this site. I was directly drawn to Small Pain in My Chest. This poem reminds me of a hollow I have in my heart everytime the memories of my late father come. I'm not a poetic person nor I'm able to write beautiful poems. But I like reading them. When I read the title, I imagined the feeling of losing. Mr. Mack beautifully and smoothly 'tells' the dying stages of the young soldier through simple words in a monologue. I love this poem.
zinchak
this is a very nice poem it touches lives that feels and also help us to be there when someone needs us
Laura
I love this poem it touched me because i have a cousin in the army that right now is in iraq and this poem tells me to keep him as close to me as possible.
Amber
This poem really touched me. I almost cried. I really love this work and feel that the person who wrote it should continue, because they obviously have a wonderful amount of talent! Sincerely, Amber
Laura
Very touching, Thankyou.
Ndia
I really like it. I mean it touched and it's so sad,like it makes you think twice about everything,now I think im going to try poetry myself
URSULA
Very touching.
Fady
loved it it truely touched me
cecilia
you know that poem is very inspiring to alot of people, I do not know if it was someone thta was sikck but it meant alot to me because i am. we need more people like you to write. good job keep up the good work.
Carolyn
You have done a GREAT job with your poem! It's been awhile since i read something so touching and close to home. My heart pores out to our soldiers and their families as well. I would like to see more of your work. keep up the good job! God bless
Sierra
This poem was a great poem. Im sorry about your lost if the poem is true. you have great talent. your poem has reminded me to love your neighbors,friends,family,and your foes. and show love everyday. iloved your poem, it was great.
Deon
Touching, sad, but beautiful.
Mickie
Simple but has a deep story and meaning. Good job.
Barbara
Absolutely beautiful! I am an active duty soldier and have a lot of friends that are making sascrifices. I have seen first hand what this war has done to people, and to find it so eliquently put into words, it's absolutely beautiful! Thank you!
anupam
wonderful!
Miranda
I loved that poem! That was really amazing! Good job!
nikita
out of all pomes i read this one really got to me i dont no how its just that its how it is like these days well done keep it up
Billy J.
Though poignant, this is a wonderful poem. I discovered it during the time I was trying to cope with losing a friend and co-worker in the Iraq Conflict who was in the US Army Reserve. All these guys who defend our country, past, present and future deserve more than we can ever give them. Poetry like this is a lasting tribute to those who gave everything. Thank you!
Tea
THIS IS THE SADDEST AND NICEST POEM I HAVE EVER READ IN MY LIFE. *CRIES*
Tomer
Hi, All I can say is this. it`s the most beautiful thing that I have read in a very long time now. I could barely read the last two lines because I started to cry. I am not a kid anymore, I`m almost 24 years old but suddenly I started to cry like a little boy, I just couldn`t help it. Simply Beautiful, I`m out of words, your song has touched me deeply. thank you michael.
Guy
this was a great poem. probly one of my favorites. it gave me a feeling of pride knowing that one day i will be a soldier and knowing that someone as talented as you is writing such magnificent poems.
Dari
I absolutely loved your poem! It makes me want to know who you are and more of your battles. If no one ever told you, Thank you! Dari Justice
Sheila
I was looking for an inspirational poem and came across this one. Truly beautiful, but get the tissues ready before you read it.
charity
i cant explain how much i loved the poem i think that was the sadest but proudest poem i have ever heard in my life
Annie
Michael, I love poetry and I write it myself but, I think I have NEVER been touched like I was by this poem. I have 2 brothers and a fiance' that serve in the military and have just returned from Iraq and Afganistan. I couldn't imagine them going through that and those thoughts of others circling their minds as they lay there dying. I got chills covering my body and tears in my eyes. You have a wonderful talent keep up that creativity flowing! Annie
Teresa
AWESOME
ron
it broke my heart very very good
Kira
One word: WOW! This poem touched me so deep i started crying. This is one of the most beautiful poems in the world. eleven thumbs up! (and that is how good it is as i only have two thumbs)
meagan
wow, this is one of the best poems i have ever read it really means alot
amanda
this is a great poem that touched my heart
Bret-Leah
absolutely beautiful. poems have touched me before, but never how this one has. beautifully written, and amazingly sad. Really makes you think about the men protecting us, and the sacrifices made for our sakes. Fantastic poem for the heros of the world.
Hanna
omg this is a beautiful poem! i seriously have been touched!
Oscar
This is an Amazingly great Poem. I'm at a lost for words, this is my favorite poem ever. It's so captivating, that it kept me and my friends reading it three to four times. Amazing Job!
Shauna
This is the best poem i have ever read. It was really sad i think think i almost started to cry!
kaaveryputhra
This is reli touching. just beautiful.
HARRY
IM REALLY TOUCH BY THE POEM, ITS NICE AND IT REALLY TOUCHES MY HEART. BECUASE EACH OF US HAS A SMALL PAIN IN THE CHEST AND A BIGGER PAIN INSIDE. I KNOW WHAT THE PERSON FEELS. IT IS REALLY ONE OF THE BEST POEMS IVE READ IN MY WHOLE LIFE THROUGH! CONGRATULATIONS TO TH E WRITER
juli
Beautiful, it hit home and touched me in a special part of my heart. Thank you.
Melinda
I really enjoyed this poem, it was quit touching. Being a poet myself i know how good it feels to write a poem and be happy with it when you read it to yourself. You should get this published. I got a few of mine published and I couldn,t be happier. I have faith in you that you could win first place. Thanks for sharing your poem with me. Luv Always DeeDee
nikki
oh my gosh! it touched me! it is so sad! i LOVE it! in school we are learning about poems, i will read this poem to my class. WELL DONE! :P :)
Karen
Beautiful poem. Beautiful writing. It gave me chills,brought tears to my eyes. I don't know if the author of this poem, experienced this himself,it sounds as if he did. Keep up your writing. I'd love to read more.
tigger-sama
this poem is amazing ,increditable, I was gocking twards the end! I loved it!
Danielle
I think this is an awesome poem, it flowed very well and I really enjoyed it!
kc
This is the sadess poem I have ever read! I am doing a poetry notebook for my class, and I have to collect poems, I'm almost done, and I have read really good poems! But this one, doesn't even compare! This is my absolute favorite! You're awesome, and you really touched me. Thanxs.
Hilary
THIS POEM IS VERYTOUCHING AND SAD AT THE SAME TIME. SEE MY BABY BROTHER IS A MARINE . WELL NOT ACTIVE BUT U KNOW THE SAYING ONCE A MARINE ALWAYS A MARINE . WE AS A COUNTRY NEED TO REMEMBER ALL OUR MEN AND WOMEN OUT THER OVERSEAS FIGHTING FOR OUR FREEDOM . BECAUSE IT IS SAID TO SAY THIS COULD BE YOUR SON , BROTHER , HUSBAND OR LOVED ONE . THERE IS NOT A DAY THAT DOESNT GO BY THAT I AM THANKFUL THAT MY LIL BROTHER /BEST FRIEND IS NOT OVER THERE B/C I COULDN'T GO THREW WHAT THESE FAMILIES HAVE BEEN GOING THREW SINCE 9-1-01 ! I WOULD LOSE IT IF MY PARENTS CAME AND TOLD ME WE HAD LOST HIM WHILE HE FIGHTING FOR RIGHTS AND FREEDOM . MAY OUR GOD BLESS AND KEEP OUR SOLIDERS IN HIS HANDS AND BRING THEM ALL HOME TO THEIR LOVED ONES SAFE AND SOUND AND UNHARMED ONE DAY SOON
Hunter
Breath-taking. I really loved this poem, Great rhyming, flows perfectly, as well as dramatic and sad. You could tell the ending from the first line, yet it still struck a chord and almost brings tears.
Sarbeswar
This poem is very good.
Lacey
Dear Mr. Mack, your poem really touched me. I think about the people across the seas and i think about what they are really fighting for. What you have said in that one page is something i wish everyone could read and understand like i did. I am only 16 but i feel as if all of what you said is apart of me, apart of everybody. I want to thank you for letting me read this peom that must have been hard for you to write. thank you for your caring! Love, Lacey
Sweta
Its realy a touchy poem wich reveals a story of the soldier. we are safe due to them but still we never know what they feel. This was the first poem I ever read which said the story of a soldier. I apreciate the author for writing a poem on the untouched and ceralessly avoided topic.
SARA
OMG i loved ur poem it made me cry keep it up later
John
Cool poem, nice usage of words, nice way of using war and humanity in the same space.
bik
beautifull. I wish i had such a tallent
Ranee
This poem brought a tear to my eye. War gives us all little pains in our chest. Thank you for the quaintness and beauty.
shabnam
this poem is very touching,u can actually feel d pain as d author beautifully describes the struggle & strength of the soldier. i think its gr8!
heather
oh my gosh this is one of the best poems i have ever had the privilage of reading. this man is an amazing poet!
shOrtcaKe
I absolutely LOVED this poem! My b/f is in the Navy and this poem really touched me!
Leslie
Thank you for allowing me to remember all of the great pride I take in the United States of America and the brave and heroic soldiers fighting for our freedom. I too, take things for granted and I was once a Marine. Thank You for sharing a very emotional but "real" poem.
Darryl
Fantastic. What a way to look at wars in another perspective.
Rosemarie
This poem touched my heart and went straight to my soul. Beautiful, absolutely beautiful!
rashi
the poem is really touching and there were tears in my eyes as i went through it .
Sue
I just wanted to tell you that I think your poem, "The Small Pain In My Chest" is one of the best poems I have ever read in that category. Having watched as my brothers went off to World War 2 and the Korean war and to see the hurt and worry in my parents face is something I will never forget. My daily prayer is for all of our military men and women whom sacrifice so much so we can stay a free nation. May God Bless you and all of them. Sue
Gladys
This poem made think about my husband, who's in the army on active duty, is so scary having your love ones in the frontline. God bless them and guard them all the time!
Kimberly
I write this through humble tears! Bravo to Michael who honours and remembers those who allow us to live the life we do! Thank you for sharing.
NADIA
GREAT WORK. TOUCHED ME. I FELT THE PAIN IN MY CHEST.
elaine
This poem touched my heart,very sad ,but true,,keep up with your work,,! 5 stars from me,,thank you
Mythic_Ruin
That was a beautiful poem. I wish I could find adequate words to describe how grateful I am that the author posted it, but alas they have stolen speech from a long winded soul. No matter, I would gladly sacrifice all ability to express myself on any given day to hear again such touching poetry.
Amber
I really liked it alot. It made stop and think that it takes alot of courage for soldiers to fight for our country, especially for the people in our country, that the soldiers don't even know
Connie
What I liked best about this poem is the ability it has to touch the heart and render one to tears. Bravo!
Sue
You surely did serve in some war. My friend and I were just talking last night about how our hearts, gratitude and love go out to all who serve our country and the families they have to leave behind. I had five brothers that served in wars from world war 2 to the Vietnam war and this poem brought home so many memories of the sacrifices our men and women make for us. Thanks for such a heart touching poem.
Natalie
My God. the man's a genius!
Peter
The poem so beautifully captures the sadness and also the kindness found in our fellow man. So many so often gave their all. The world hurtles on but let us remember in this beautiful poem the futility of war.
amy
wow! this poem hase toched me in evry way i steel have cheels all over me I love it!
Ashok
Simply Superb. I was deeply moved.
Allison
I have read lot of the poems on this website and few have touched me as deeply as yours did. Thank you.
Misty
I have read this poem in my emails. I am certain it has circled the globe. Reading it here once again made my blood run cold. It is beautiful beyond belief, and my only regret is the cercumstances that brought it to us. God Bless you.
shanise
I really love that poem it really had me thinkin on how life is!
Rachel
Usually I only rad love poems but this one caught my eye and I thought it was excellent. Congratulation to the writer.
Hunter
This poem is a beautiful peace of literature, I'm beginging to discover poetry myself. And by far this is my favorite, as well as the saddest ever read. I give it a 11 on a scale from 1-10.
tharangi
It is a very sweet thing to read, sweeter to realize how beutiful it is with tears so real!
Kara
Your poem really touched me. it is great!
Wayne
This is fantastic and sad. Beautiful Piece
ashlee
i thought it was very touching
Ethel
Simple yet touching. u can b a great poet one day.
Laura
All I can Say is WOW This is very Good
jeanette
This piece of poetry is deeply affecting. beautifully put together.
Jean Pierre
found this poem excellent and that made me cry. With all my best regards and congratulations all the way down from Santiago de Chile
N
This is very good and I would think, echos the thoughts of many of our boys.
Rebekah
what a touching, excellent poem. beutifully written, by a beautiful author
Patti
Very sad
Marilyn
this poem was so sad and dramatic i felt like crying -im sorry for anything that happened-but we sometimes have to be strong although sometimes you still cant bear it. I hope you can have that strength though and good luck to you and im sorry for your friend who was lost
voila
tremendous very moving touched me emesely brought tears to my eyes congrayes
Lori
What can I say that someone else hasn't said. It is amazing. left me speechless and weeping. You have an incredible gift Michael. Please keep writing. Thank you.
katie
this poem really expresses u and dont think theres another like it, its heart filled and could definetley win over some awards. u have a wonderful talent. never stop writting. it really takes people into a whole new world.
Carly
This poem is wonderful I love it.
Jessica
Well, what can I say? Being from a long line of sailors and in an NJROTC(Navy Junior Reserve Officer Training Corps)I have loads of honor and respect for those who have gone before us. I'm sure that the knights in shining armor of our past thank you for telling the world exactly how much they gave so that we could live. There is a large pain in my heart also for that young soldier boy as well as for them all.
Kelly
Awesome! You brought the soldier to life. Many have never known the true pain of our countries heros.
Guinn
This is such a beautiful yet sad poem. Great gift you have
alejandra
Impresionante! i touches you. wow!
JAYNE
SPEECHLESS I THINK THE TEARS THAT ARE RUNNING DOWN MY FACE. ARE WORDS ENOUGH!
Yian
Hi your poem is very touching and it made me realise how vulnerable our lives are.
Tyson
this was one of the greatest things I have ever read. Im' leaving for the service soon and it's nice to know if I die its protecting people like this. Thank you
Jeannie
you are an Excellent story teller. jd
Jen
Michael, this is an excellent poem. It was sad, but very inspirational. It's these experiences that help us to overcome obstacles in our lives, and I'm sure you will do great things. Keep the faith, and God bless.
diane
OMG! Ive read alot of poems on this site. but none that touched my like yours did. nice job! Touching, it made me cry.
Hayley
wow. just. yea wow :D you have a gift and it's obvious to see. if all your poems are of this quality have you ever thought about getting a book published? anyway - fantastic work, keep it up because i'm sure i'm not the only person who will be looking out for your work in the future :)
Barb
I had just written an essay about my experience with WWII service men coming home from war and finding "little girls" while they had grown into men when I read your poem. All this on Veterans Day! I really can't tell you how emotional it made me feel since Bush wants to declare war and I have had a father in WWI, a husband in WWII and a son in Vietnam. This poem reaches the very depths of my soul and when I read it to my husband (a WWII vet) along with my essay, even he cried. I would so much like to read more of your writing.
Sarah
That was such a great poem. It actually made me sit and think of what it was actually like out there in those day. I actually cried to!
Dana
truly amazing work, it was beautiful and heartfelt.
rhime
i must say that i've read this poem almost a 100 times and still touches me very deeply i've read your other poems also i know them all almost by heart
ann
i have just read this poem and send it to my dad who is 82 and fought in the second world war in burma i am sure he will like it
Emily
i am absolutely speechless
Paul
A poem so well written, with the ability to make you feel that pain
Melin
This has to be one of the most beautiful works ever written. I love it!
Zira
Michael that was the best poem that i ever have bein told, it gave gold to my soul. Thanx
Cody
I am new here to netpoets and so far id have to say this is the best poem on life ive ever seen. This poem makes you think about life and how short it could and can be
Cuds
This was a very emotional poem and I really enjoyed it.
David
USMC 1969-1972 I cried
emmy
i really like this poem it is really toughing and i wanna say good job on it and good luck on the rest of your poems
donna
i really enjoyed this poem. i could feel the pain and the warm feeling going out to the soldier.
BRITT
THIS WAS GREAT AND I AM NOW ABSOLUTELY SPEECHLESS
Roman
Awesome poem. there those who deserved to be remembered, but they are forgotten
Win
Michael, great work!
Earthspirit
This poem is incredible! I am in tears and without words to express the emotions stirred within.
Maria
This is my first visit to this excellent site (excellent because of poets like you!). Keep the good work up! Pure talent!
Aimee
OMG, that was awesome. i have tears in my eyes. That only happens with a few poems. WOW, you can write well. Keep writing!
vanessa
Amazing! It really made me sit and think.
natalie
this was a great poem! it was touching to the heart i would love to write like that is that a true story?
Joyce
Michael-Wonderful poems as far as I've gotten. I just had to vote for this one. It touched me deeply since I've had 2 sons and ex-husband that were all military. God Bless--keep up the good works.
Sera
i am new here and this is the first poem i read i felt struck by its poignancy. it went straight to my heart and mositened my eyes. above all, i relate to the small hole which can be so incredibly lethal. it can come in so many ways and shapes.
Jill
Absolutly amazing poem *tears*
Clare
YOU HAVE A GIFT. USE IT. PLEASE WRITE MORE!
Zumba
This poem was well wordless I cant exspess it with words.
jim
Sad, but wonderful. I have two sons each of which have been in the service. One is a veteran of seventeen years plus a little, and I have silently been afraid for him most of that time. It's a wonderful poem despite my fears.
brianna
this was so sad that i cried and i hope this poem is put on top.
Alicia
your poem was the best I have ever read..I attend a special poets class at my school, if it is alright with you..can I share it with them..I am sure that they will in joy it alot..You are a talented poet..and don't ever give it up!
mellisa
this is such a good poem. it brought tears to my eyes. i think that you did such a good job writting this. i admire your ability to write.
Raquel
Touching peom, like a painters canvas, you see the vivid imagages come to life. Never before have I read a peom with so much feeling. Great one. Thank you for sharing it with me
Swifty
that was just so incredible, you brought me to tears
Christie
This poem touched me. I thought it was wonderful!
annie
Beyond words.Absolutely stunning.Thankyou.
febs
very timely poem . how i wish i could also write such a beatiful poem .
Alex
A very touching..one indeed. Left me with a bitter feeling..
Sweet
this was very powerful, congradulations, you truly have a poets heart. It is beautiful, so share it with the world.
Peter
A superb and heartfelt poem, you have a great talent! Keep on writing.
melody
such a touching poem. it makes you think of so many things.
Sane
sensitivity
Falon
This is a really amazing poem. It really makes u think
Kellie
Oh my god im speechless this poem is the best poem ever
Moiz
Bravo.. I dont think any words I say will do justice to this poem.
Heather
Reading this poem put a very large pain in my chest. I could not stop crying it was so beautiful. Thank you Micheal for your Awsome talent.
meghan
as I read this poem I felt like I was the man standing there, crying with the young man sitting underneath that tree. this poem touched my heart in my different ways, and I have to say Michael, you are a very talented person to write in such a way. Good job. Beautiful piece.
Shah
A truely wonderful poem... I'd be proud to have written it!
Joe
I thought it really was a good poem :o)
Tonia
This was one of the most beautiful poems I have ever read. It really touched me and by the way this guy wrote it you could just feel the emotion that the two characters must have felt.
Jessica
This is a wonderful and very touching poem.
Michelle
This poem is touching, and your talent is appreciated. keep on writing, i enjoy your work. :) .. I feel so very satisfied when i read a good poem before bed.
Lady
You've quite a way with words, you know, displaying affection, life and woe, Teary eyes when I did read this, I think it is the best, When reading such heartfelt words about that small pain in his chest.
Jessica
You are a VERY talented poet. You convey such deep emotions, words cannot express. I encourage you to continue writing and touching those who read your poetry
jennifer
actually, i am pretty much speechless.
Ashok
That was awesome. I walked the path with you and shared the moment as the boy died in your arms cradled against the "big hole in your chest". Why do we need war and the pain that comes with it. If God granted me one wish today Michael, you will be president.
Julia
very well done! top on my list and any list of poetry for that matter!
Rita
To say thank you to the men and wemon who stand up for all of us is never enoth.God bless all of them ,and remember them the next time you talk to God
emmma
this poem rules
Aelaine
When I finished reading this i began to cry. This is a very very Good poem.
mystic_mallory
I am so moved, all I can say is this was absolutely beautiful in a sad, but true way.
Gary
A wonderful tribute to all of the ordinary men and women who have performed heroic deeds for the benefit of all of us. Touching, sentimental, and real.
Nancy
WOW! I loved it, painful as it was. I is truly a beautiful poem. We lost loved ones in war. This reminds me how real, how sad, how senceles is war.
Gwendolin
This poem is so beautiful and it touched me so deeply.
rsr
very touching
Mary
shows war---- wonderful wonderful wonderful
Alia
This poem touched my heart like I never thought words could. I loved it. Please keep writing.
Lee
I Found this poem fantastic in its simplicity but its intensity and what made it more touching for me was that i read it moments before 11am on 11/11/00 just before the minutes silence. Once more fantastic well done.
Madza
Touching, I'm all choke up!
Rachel
This is so well written. I loved it. Michael definately has a great future in writing. Keep up the good work.
Cinnamon
My father is in the army, twanged at my heartstrings. The poem's very evocative. Reminded me slightly, and in a good way, of After Blenheim by Robert Southey.
Vaughn
I found that to be a very heartwarming poem.
Baby
Very touching, make me feel very raw.
Nefertiti
Thank YOU!!!!!!! For remembering those who gave their lives just so we could all live in this great country. It seems that we can eaisly forget why we have that day of from school and work. I felt connected to you the whole time I read this poem. It touched me and I greatful that there are people in this world who think of the ones who have to live with the pain of not having their son or daughter with them on the holidays we spend with our families. Keep giving the world this wonderful poetry to read. Thank you
Mick
I have been there...... it brought it back , but not pain... thanks
Rachel
I sat there and as I read, could feel the tears welling up inside! I can't put into words how emotion driven this poem appears to be - fantastic!
Ranea
So often people don't realize what that these brave men and women give up their life and their families to ensure that our country remains "the land of the free", but this heartfelt poem is surely a start in telling them. Thanks, Ranea (a former Navy Wife of a Desert Storm Veteran)
Neeraja
Really Touching!!! Beautifull!!!
weeping
this poem was one of the best I have ever read, it reached out to me and brought tears to my eyes. I would like to thank the poet for allowing me to have the chance to read such beauty.
Chris
Wow. Very emotive poem, almost cried reading it! Top draw.
Zaida
I liked this poem very much
maaz
While I am not in a position to assess poetry, I would say your poem was really nice. It brought a tear in my eye
Sherry
This poem is well writen and very touching.
Jala
This type of poem is not what I usally read. I truely enjoyed it. It makes you think about so many things. I loved it!
Wendy
Beautiful poem.
Christine
I cried.
Tracey
I haven't felt a poem touch me the way this one did in such a long time. It is wonderfully beautiful and touching sad at the same time.
Nancy
Now I have a small pain in my chest. Absolutely beautiful.
erica
I truly thought this was a wonderful poem. It makes you ask yourself how many of us would give up that drink of water to help a dying individual...I have to say probably not many...
Neeraja
In one word.... Beautiful!!!
Amy
WOW...
sc
I thought this poem was absolutely superb. You are a talented writer please keep writing more.
Alastair
Balladeer, this one simply got hold of me and squeezed. My dad's side of the family has always been in the military, and this one struck a deep chord within me. Wonderful writing, my friend.
mike
This is an awesome poem - it brings many days of my assignment to JUSMAAG in the y'Drang Valley in the early early 60's. . . . . God Bless you for that
Christopher
This has to be one of the most touching poems I've ever read in my life. It causes a large hole in my heart each time I read it.
Richard
Vote, Hell Put This On The Top Of The List. It Made Me Cry As I Know The Pain And Could Feel The Hurt.
Laura
i'd just like to congratulate Michael, this poem made me cry.its the best poem ive ever heard.thank you
Amy
This is an absolute beautiful poem- this poem I believe says all that I wish I could say about life. This is an excellent piece of work.
unavailable
You can clearly see that this author has alot of compassion in his heart. But I think possibly he has had a tragedy happen in his life and is applying it to his poem. But I would definately vote for this poem.
collette
This was an excellent poem. Very sad, but very true and extremely well written. I really enjoyed it.
Cara
I enjoyed the poem it was interesting yet... emotional.
Becki
I thought this poem was wonderful! You can feel the pain the boy is going through as it is being described. Great job, have you written anything else? I'd love to read it!
Lydia
This was a very touching poem and from the heart.I give this poem an A .
Amy
You have written a very good poem.
sara
This is the best poem i have ever read in forever! I hope u don't take this out! Please don't!
Ibi
Hi Mike. I'm new to this site. Real new, I just tripped over it. I liked your poem. I am interested in History so I seek these type of poems. Even though it is built on a sad foundation I feel it still manages to have a 'feel good' feeling.
David
I was moved by this

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